Man of Steel Haiku Review

Superman Haiku Review

1. I Liked the first half/
Interesting alternate/
Krypton backstory/
#haiku

2. Good production design/
Krypton’s parallel of earth/
Though clumsy green points/
#haiku

3. Politics’ Absence/
Was strangely highlighted by/
Light skinned black gen’rals/
#haiku

4. Did not like the suit/
Sent by Jor El predicting/
His hero status/
#haiku

5. Kryptonite metal/
Was anything from Krypton/
Should have proved fatal/
#haiku

6. Paradoxically/
I liked the “S-Key” tying/
Krypton to present/
#haiku

7. Hollywood action/
Swallowed the movie’s last half/
With gross Air-Force-Porn/
#haiku

8. Immigrant status/
Of Kal-El bothered no-one/
Because he was white/
#haiku

9. Liked the destruction/
Of the spy predator drone/
Comments on freedom/
#haiku

10. *Man of Steel* movie/
Was not without some fissures/
I’ll give it”B+”/
#haiku

Thinking Fathers Haiku

17a. Happy Father’s Day/
I owe you everything:/
Especially love/
#haiku

17b. Happy Father’s Day/
Thanks for trying and trying/
& understanding/
#haiku

17c. Happy Father’s Day:/
Doing your best ev’ry day/
Helped to make me, me/
#haiku

17d. Happy Father’s Day/
To all struggling parents/
And patient children/
#haiku

17e. Happy Father’s Day:/
The burden is the blessing/
Thank you for playing/
#haiku

17f. Happy Father’s Day:/
The burden is the blessing/
Thanks for engaging/
#haiku

17g. Happy Father’s Day:/
The burden is the blessing/
For this I’m grateful/
#haiku

An Agnostic’s Repetitious Sermon in Haiku

20a. I cannot forgive/
Religions their predations/
Though I know better/
#haiku

20b. I cannot forgive/
Religions their predations/
Though I know that’s MAN/
#haiku

20c. I cannot forgive/
Religions their shortcomings/
Though I know better/
#haiku

20d. I cannot forgive/
Religions their shortcomings/
(Man should not play G_d)/
#haiku

20e. I cannot forgive/
Religions their shortcomings/
(Though faith may ease pain)/
#haiku

20f. I cannot forgive/
Religions their shortcomings/
(Perhaps I’m jealous)/
#haiku

20g. I cannot forgive/
Religions their shortcomings/
(This has cost me much)/
#haiku

20h. I cannot forgive/
Religions their shortcomings*/
(I’m not sure G_d cares)/
#haiku *predations

Simple Truths Sonnet

Simple Truths
The simplest truths obscure the best lies/
If you think the meaning is obvious/
Look up at the happy blue summer skies/
& know how it covers the blackness of space/

In life what is apparent is rarely/
Even vaguely materially real/
With work and introspection we barely/
Understand the selves we love with such zeal/

Simplicity is the strange, cruelest trap/
That, mesmerized, we willingly fall in/
Like glistening amber, when it’s still sap/
Easy answers delude the strengths within/

So when “simple” is the “best” solution/
Excavate beneath ease’s pollution/

Desire Sonnet (all 4 drafts)

(revisions in reverse order)

Desire Sonnet
draft 4.
How intoxicating human desire/
Imaginations and passions inspire/
All-encompassing, these needs created/
By which nothing real* can be abated/

Desire refocuses human vision:/
Within, our souls surrender decisions;/
What we want to possess, possesses us/
We are controlled by our uncontrolled lust/

Within all living beings there exists/
A primitive saboteur who then twists/
Our selfish wants into eternal needs/
Without conscious awareness that it’s greed/

Our deep lusts, fantasies, (& tiny wants)/
Are fruits of our subconscious Ego’s taunts/
*true

Desire Sonnet
draft 3.
How intoxicating human desire/
Imaginations and passions inspire/
All-encompassing, these needs created/
By which nothing real* can be abated/

Desire refocuses human vision:/
Within, our souls surrender decisions;/
What we want to possess, possesses us/
We are controlled by our uncontrolled lust/

Within all living beings there exists/
A primitive saboteur who then twists/
Our selfish wants into eternal needs/
Without conscious awareness that it’s greed/

Our deep lusts, fantasies, & even needs/
Are flowers of our Ego’s little seeds/
*true

Desire Sonnet
draft 2.
How intoxicating human desire/
Imaginations and passions inspire/
All encompassing, are needs created/
That nothing mortal can at all make sated/

Desire refocuses human vision:/
Within, our souls surrender decisions;/
What we want to possess, possesses us/
We are controlled by our uncontrolled lust/

Within conscious human beings there is/
An enemy spy with a trite “pop-quiz:”/
Biological or cultural? What’s/
That which overrides or undermines thoughts/

Our deep lusts, fantasies, & even needs/
Are flowers of our Ego’s little seeds/

Desire Sonnet
draft 1.
How intoxicating human desire/
Imaginations and passions inspire/
All encompassing, are needs created/
That nothing mortal can at all make sated/

Desire refocuses human visions:/
Within, our souls rescind decisions;/
What we want to possess, possesses us/
We are controlled by our uncontrolled lust/

Within conscious human beings there is/
An enemy spy with a trite pop-quiz:/
Biological or cultural? What’s/
That which overrides or undermines thoughts/

Our deep lusts, fantasies, & even needs/
Are flowers of our Ego’s little seeds/

Forward

36. I struggle with fear/
Doubting my abilities/
& accomplishments/
#haiku

37. Fear keeps me from life/
Scaffolds insecurities/
Paralyzing me/
#haiku

38. I can do this job/
It is not beyond my skills/
I WILL push forward/
#haiku

39. Worst that can happen/
Is I look a bit stupid/
I should care less/
#haiku

40. Dawn’s iridescence/
Blends today’s optimism/
With yesterday’s fear/
#haiku

42. Poems together/
Inspiring myself on/
A #haiku pep-talk/

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Contented Sonnet

Contented Life Sonnet II
[RErevision]

I have scaled the dizzying heights in life/
Where style’s premiums don’t matter/
Enjoying simple pleasures with my wife/
Make youth’s sweet conquests trite anti-matter/

Garish achievement of modern excess/
Burnished by wealth & youth’s pneumatic curves/
Are distractions, mere possessions tasteless:/
Undermining dignity and reserve/

Life’s simple common everyday pleasures/
Companionship, comfort, community/
Are destroyed by modern drastic measures:/
(Disgusting excess’s impunity)/

So I will enjoy what I’m enjoying/
Though to wanton desire it’s annoying/

Contented Life Sonnet
[unrevised]

I’ve attained the high plateau in life/
Where style’s premiums don’t matter/
Enjoying simple pleasures with my wife/
Make youth’s competition seem like blather/

Garish achievement of modern excess/
Burnished by wealth & pneumatic youth’s curves/
Those distractions, of possessions tasteless,/
From the straight and narrow will make you swerve/

Life’s simple psychological pleasures/
Companionship, comfort, community/
Are consumed by modern drastic measures/
(Disgusting excess’s impunity)/

So I will enjoy what I’m enjoying/
Though to consumerism:* annoying/
*capitalism

10a. I wrote a sonnet/
On middle aged contentment/
Because I’m happy/
#haiku

10b. I wrote a sonnet/
On middle aged contentment/
To convince myself/
#haiku

Ambulatory Surgery

2/19/13

12. Ambulatory/
Hand surgery with hardware/
I’m a bit afraid/
#haiku

13. Pre-surgery fast/
Difficult because I eat/
Habitually/
#haiku

14. Waiting room TV/
Game shows: American greed/
Fight for un-needed/
#haiku

15. Loud television/
Drowning out humanity/
Easing their function/
#haiku

17. Stripped of belongings/
Ev’rything vouchered like jail/
Sit waiting for Doc./
# haiku

18. Climb to the table/
Painful IV under skin/
Drift off to warm drugs/
#haiku

19. Post-Operation/
Dizzy nausea from drugs/
Confused and cold/
#haiku

20. Nurses & Doctors/
At your most traumatic times/
Are simply workers/
#haiku

21. I am in some pain/
It is the pain of healing/
Life keeps improving/
#haiku

16. Surgery went well/
Discomfort is unpleasant/
I will be just fine/
#haiku

Academic Abolitionist Sonnet

Editing Brown Sonnet

Addressing this paper academic/
Re-reading & re-writing ideas/
Illustrates my problems are endemic:/
From the pompous I want the most cheers/

The thesis: “undermined literacy”/
By a bright loyal abolitionist/
Was intellectual apostasy/
Formal language makes Blacks contortionists/

I am like runaway slaves showing off/
With my pompous elevated language/
I want my enemies their hats to doff/
For this approval I am most anxious/

It is no small irony I study/
People from long ago like me/

Valentine Mine

2/14/13 ❤

2. On valentines’ day/
We try to live up to Love/
But my love’s too big/
#haiku

2b. On valentines’ day/
We try to live up to Love/
No THING could show love/
#haiku

2c. On valentines’ day/
I try to deserve your Love/
But I’m unworthy/
#haiku

2d. On valentines’ day/
We try to live up to Love/
But love is too big/
#haiku

3. The “miracle you”/
Made me the man that I am/
I am so grateful/
#haiku

4. We are an alloy:/
Alone just Copper & Tin/
Together we’re bronze/
#haiku

4b. Linda & Stafford/
Alone just Tin & Copper/
Together we’re bronze/
#haiku

5. Linda Pragmatic/
Stafford too aromatic/
Miracle children/
#haiku

6. Children, don’t chase Love/
In its icky human form/
Real LOVE’s not mere “cute”/
#haiku

7. Love is the beauty/
That human eyes cannot see/
Only hearts* know love/
#haiku *souls

8. Love is pure sweetness/
A dark flavor so sublime/
No tongue can enjoy/
#haiku

8b. Love is pure sweetness/
A dark flavor so sublime/
Mortals taste heaven/
#haiku

9. Love is pure vision/
Seeing beyond physical/
To beauty itself/
#haiku

10. Love is sonic joy/
The music of creation/
Played aloud for you/
#haiku

11. Loving you transforms/
Moments into eternities/
Of pure happiness/
#haiku

12a. Our lusts have become/
Disposable fantasies/
Dreams meant for instants/
#haiku

12b. Desire and lust are/
Disposable fantasies/
Dreams meant for instants/
#haiku

13. Hottie cards expire/
After time foeveryone/
Except our belov’d/
#haiku

14. Beauty’s brief shelf life/
Often expires in-noticed/
Though always observed/
#haiku